I've attached your first essay. This is a very good fictional story; you're a gifted writer. The story is engaging and very descriptive. For this assignment, you need to present your ideas in essay form rather than a creative writing story form. Typically the narrative essay tells a personal story based on your personal experience and while it may tell a part of your story, it is not a purely fictional story. Also the personal narrative has a main point to develop and support.
Let me know if you have questions or need my help revising. This essay is due as a part of your first portfolio on (10/28/10). I'll post a portfolio checklist in Angel.